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« Reply #165 on: February 05, 2012, 07:00:02 PM »

Credits page > Special Thanks: Mi'chelle Walker has got an apostrophe in her name. Wink

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« Reply #166 on: February 05, 2012, 10:52:10 PM »

Credits page > Special Thanks: Mi'chelle Walker has got an apostrophe in her name. Wink

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Heh. That's actually the way her name is supposed to be written.
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« Reply #167 on: February 06, 2012, 04:03:14 AM »

Credits page > Special Thanks: Mi'chelle Walker has got an apostrophe in her name. Wink

Cheers! Cheesy

Heh. That's actually the way her name is supposed to be written.

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« Reply #168 on: February 06, 2012, 09:59:30 AM »

Though I could see where folks who don't follow Brandon's entourage wouldn't realize that. No worries Wink
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« Reply #169 on: February 06, 2012, 08:13:26 PM »

Yeah, its a very exotic (and beautiful) name.
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« Reply #170 on: February 07, 2012, 01:06:59 AM »

layout:
The character sheet for Gavon on page 53 seems to be filled in with a font different from the other sheets (I'm guessing regular instead of bold)

Huh. So it seems. I'll look into that.

Yeah, its a very exotic (and beautiful) name.

I was very careful with that page, and I'm happy to report that there's only one issue that I know of (and that it's something I couldn't have possibly known before we released). Smiley
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« Reply #171 on: February 07, 2012, 11:24:30 AM »

I appreciate the list that was compiled. If it's not too late, I have some more to add to it:

Page 25 "...as houses jockeys for position..." 'jockeys' should be 'jockey'
Page 84 In the Occupation list, there is "Informer" and "Informant". Perhaps one of them should be "Infiltrator", like in the example text that follows?
Page 96 In the Destiny list, I believe that "Murdered my best friend" is a holdover from the Tragedy list, and inappropriate for a Destiny.
Page 396 "...more skaa prisoners to into the poisonous depths." should be "...more skaa prisoners to send into the poisonous depths."
Page 398 "...truly loyal to Lord Ruler..." should be "...truly loyal to the Lord Ruler..."
Page 398 "...secretly hording money..." should be "...secretly hoarding money..."
Page 398 "...before Lord Ruler's forces..." should be "...before the Lord Ruler's forces..."
Page 400 "...while the crew leads pursers..." should be "...while the Crew leads pursuers..."
Page 402 "...to see what they the Crew can make of its newfound freedom..." Remove 'they'
Page 404 "...come up with the principals..." I believe that this might be better as "...come up with the principles...", though I suppose the original works if it is about providing people with positions of power, rather than determining laws to govern with.
Page 406 "...and goals fuel of every story..." Remove 'of'
Page 406 "...steps to bring everyone players into..." Remove 'everyone' or 'players'
Page 414 "...and tools they thin the Heroes..." should be "...and tools they think the Heroes..."
Page 415 "...these issues as become problems." should be "...these issues as they become problems."
Page 415 "Has our informant has also sold information..." Remove second 'has'
Page 416 "...it's time the players ask of their plan:" should be "it's time for the players to ask of their plan:"
Page 424 "The best allies are useful and without undermining the Heroes" Remove 'and'
Page 427 ..."provides him critical insights..." should be "...provides him with critical insights..."
Page 430 "Think about how each of the Heroes' options;" Remove 'how'
Page 431 "...because while running game..." should be "because while running the game..."
Page 434 "Still another may loves indulging..." Either drop the 'may' or change 'loves' to 'love'
Page 434 "Sticking to an rigid script..." 'an' should be 'a'
Page 437 "...are what you'll remember for in years to come..." 'for' should be removed.
Page 438 "...unfolding an a traditional..." should be "...unfolding as a traditional..."
Page 439 "...and well they should..." might change to "...as well they should..."
Page 441 "...on his or her sheet to make a single improvement to her character..." Consistency. 'his or her' is needed in both places.
Page 442 "If you thin the improvement..." should be "If you think the improvement..."
Page 443 "...how often do you the camera will check in on events?" I think something is missing. Perhaps it could be "..."how often does the camera focus on an event?"
Page 446 "...recovers all lost Health, Reputation, and Willpower" is listed twice in the bullet points below the Long Breathers section
Page 457 "...as it lets deals with the issue..." should be ..."as it lets you deal with the issue..."
Page 462 "Though he's not well loved, the revered and awed..." Something is missing here. Perhaps it should be "Though he's not well loved, he is revered and awed..."
Page 463 "...there is, and never has been..." should be "...there is not, and never has been..."
Page 468 "...and you when that happens, embrace the moment." "you" should either be removed or moved in front of 'embrace'
Page 477 "To quality..." 'quality' should be 'qualify'

Pat or Alex, can you guys give an approximation of when you plan to push out the next revision? I want to keep going over the text with a fine-toothed comb, but also want to avoid having to refind page numbers if the new revision is released before I post again. I realize that you guys are going to allow a window for corrections after the next release, so maybe it would be better for me to wait until then to continue?
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« Reply #172 on: February 07, 2012, 05:39:58 PM »

minor layout topic:
page 78: The signature to the left hand picture is cut off on the right hand side
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« Reply #173 on: February 07, 2012, 11:09:14 PM »

Here's a few more:

Page 286 "Characters can gain Allomantic Powers in three ways:" 'Allomantic' should be 'Hemalurgic'
Page 292 "...to oppose the affects of another." should be "...to oppose the effects of another."
Page 306 "For each charge you tap, your increases..." should be "For each charge you tap, your weight increases..."
Page 307 "...stop a huge rolling boulder its tracks..." should be "...stop a huge rolling boulder in its tracks..."
Page 317 "...committing a memory to a coppermind as soon as it's no longer immediately useful as possible..." should perhaps be rearranged as "...committing a memory to a coppermind as soon as possible after it's no longer immediately useful.."
Page 326 "...might result in them traded insults..." should be "...might result in them trading insults..."
Page 332 "...and keep burning Zinc..." should be "...and keep burning Brass..."
Page 338 "...and reaffirm them those beliefs." 'them' is unnecessary.
Page 355 "Gold a rare exception..." should be "Gold is a rare exception..."
Page 363 "...which can be used an emergency supply..." should be "...which can be used as an emergency supply..."
Page 382 "...to let the others have get creative too." should be "...to let the others be creative, too."
Page 384 "...the very best way shape the tone..." should be "...the very best way to shape the tone..."
Page 384 "...or anything else is going to..." should be"...or anything else that is going to..."
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« Reply #174 on: February 08, 2012, 04:42:16 AM »

Pat or Alex, can you guys give an approximation of when you plan to push out the next revision? I want to keep going over the text with a fine-toothed comb, but also want to avoid having to refind page numbers if the new revision is released before I post again. I realize that you guys are going to allow a window for corrections after the next release, so maybe it would be better for me to wait until then to continue?

Revisions are underway now and will be done shortly. This is not necessarily an indication that you should expect the revised PDF shortly, however, as once I'm done with my revisions the InDesign files have to go back into layout to correct interior text flow, and even after I get the files back I still have to complete the index.

The next iteration will most likely be the print-ready version, so if you've got anything else, now's the time. It's unlikely at this stage that we'll be going through another round of revisions before locking the book down. 
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« Reply #175 on: February 08, 2012, 12:22:54 PM »

page 88: maybe
"Still, those without any powers tend to develop in other ways, and so they gain two additional Traits of their choice."
should better be
"Still, those with weak Powers tend to develop in other ways, and so they gain two additional Traits of their choice."
since that is what it's called above and in the example.
Or use "magical or superhuman abilities" instead of "powers" when saying they have none at all.
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« Reply #176 on: February 08, 2012, 12:49:18 PM »

Here are the last of the changes I could find on this readthrough (with the exception of comma use):

Page 56 "Then your mother discovered your fatherís true lineage and sent house assassins to kill you both. Witnessing your motherís death caused you to Snap, and you fled." Who hired the assassins? From the second sentence, it sounds like the father hired them. Perhaps it could be clarified? Something like "Then your mother discovered your fatherís true lineage and he sent house assassins to kill you both."
Page 145 "...a bit worse then the one to follow." 'then' should be 'than'
Page 179 "...the rest become Defense Dice become Defense Dice" Remove the second 'become Defense Dice'
Page 196 '...is referred to as "taking a step forward" it...' Remove 'it'
Page 219 "...are likely to inflict suffer emotional..." 'suffer' should be removed
Page 226 "...deadens a target from others..." should be "...deadens a target to others..."
Page 239 Difficulty 1 Example: "...travel by hors..." should be "...travel by horse..."
Page 243 Difficulty 5 Example: "...about clandestine deal..." should be "...about a clandestine deal..."
Page 247 "Influence dice are not lost..." 'Influence'should be 'Spirit'
Page 255 There are two consecutive periods in the second paragraph under "Playing a Kandra Hero"
Page 269 "...from Hemalurgic spikes can gain Stunts..." should be "...from Hemalurgic spikes and can gain Stunts..."
Page 270-1 "A typical Allomancer carries several on these vials..." 'on' should be 'of'
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« Reply #177 on: February 10, 2012, 03:20:53 AM »

One last thing that wasn't in the lists -- On page 411 in the "what's your method?" table, the last two possible methods appear to be names.

Edit: Just noticed another -- in the Treatise Metallurgic, when describing what can be done when tapping 10 or more charges of Copper, "millennia" should be "millennium".
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« Reply #178 on: February 16, 2012, 02:28:46 AM »

I guess I missed this one:

Page 342 Second bullet point: 'Dualumin' should be spelled 'Duralumin'
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« Reply #179 on: February 24, 2012, 01:41:43 AM »

I didn't see this one mentioned, so I believe that it is another:

Page 280 "The more charges are tapped at once, the more noticeable these changes become." should be "The more charges that are tapped at once, the more noticeable these changes become."
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